Date: December 18, 2003 10:08 AM
Author: ANSHERWOOD
Subject: santa
HI'Think your writing is very good.BUT you can do more then that but it was very good.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:31 PM
Author: RY sherwood
Santa lives in the North pole.
Santa's home is red and white.
Santa's workshop is all filled with fun toys to play with.
The Reindeer are watching Rudolph the Red Nose Reindeer movie it is so interesting.
Mrs Claus's bedroom is a big mess so misses claus will clean it.
Santa's work shop is fun an filled with excitment.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:53 PM
Author: RY sherwood
Santa lives at the cold wintery north pole.
Santa's house is cherryred and cristlywhite.
Santa's workshop is filled with lots and lots of toys.
The Reindeers are watching Rudolph the Red Nose Reindeer
playing with his mom and dad?
Mrs Claus's bedroom is a very mesy room?
Santa's work shop is derty and mesy?
I think that you did a very good job and you can do a better job that I've fixt?
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Date: December 08, 2003 03:17 PM
Author: BA SHERWOOD
Subject: Character2
Santa.
Santa has a big stomach and a merry jolly laugh inside of him.
When Santa trims his beard has a small and cute fuzzy beard.
Plus as you put your finger through his beard you can feel magic going through your fingers!
Santa is an old saint that represents Christmas.
Santa worked really hard in his life. One of the things he did is go around during Christmas time and he would put gifts on peoples porches.
And then when the children would wake up they would run downstairs and open the door and they would see the presents lying there and their faces would brighten up!
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:52 PM
Author: me SHERWOOD
Subject: SANTA
I think that our work was very good and very discripshon. But i think you can do much more then that but you did good.
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Date: December 08, 2003 03:18 PM
Author: me (SHERWOOD)
Subject: Setting2
SANTA Santa was up in the North Pole in the North Pole it is very cold. There are polar bears in the North Pole . Santa has lots of cookies beside his bed. In Santa's room there is a hat on his shelf. There are a big packs of presents he even has presents under his tree in his room. Santa's room has a alarm clock in it so he will not be late to deliver presents to all good boys and girls. Beside his bed on a night table he has a glass of milk in case he gets thirsty he can have a drink. Santa's room is so very very messy, MRS. CLAUS does not like it one bit but what can she do.
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Date: December 15, 2003 03:04 PM
Author: MASHERWOOD
Subject: Reply
I really liked the writing.
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Date: December 08, 2003 03:19 PM
Author: CO (SHERWOOD)
Subject: SETTING2
SANTA'S SETTING Santa lives at the North Pole Santa has a workshop. He has many elves to help him out. He builds toys for the kids. Santa lives with his wife,his reindeer and his elves. Santa lives way way in the middle part of the North Pole
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Date: January 05, 2004 06:56 PM
Author: LA SHERWOOD
Subject: santa
You have a good description. Can you start your sentences in different ways?
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Date: December 08, 2003 03:21 PM
Author: KE (SHERWOOD)
Subject: Character2
characer kelvin
Santa lives at the North Pole.
He as a white mustache.
The colour of his clothes are red and white.
He rides on reindeer.
He carrys a big bag on his back.
He is big and fat and he says "Ho ho ho! Merry Christmas!"
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:55 PM
Author: RY SHERWOOD
Subject: reply to chrismast
I think your story was awsome because it was long and it had stuff you need to know about.I think you can improve it by adding discription.
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:37 PM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
I liked what you've did. But you can do much better then you've did with your writing.
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Date: January 05, 2004 01:57 PM
Author: RY SHERWOOD
characer kelvin
Santa lives at the North Pole in a great house with brown walls.
His mustache is as white snow mustache with crums all over it.
The colour of his velvet clothes are tender red and white chocolate.
He rides on thee reindeer he loves them all very much.
He carrys a light big on his slump shoulder.
He is huge,chubby and he says "Ho ho ho! Merry Christmas!"
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:38 PM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
characer kelvin
Santa lives at the cold wintery North Pole.
He as a white fluffy muststash.
The colour of his clothes are cherryred and cristwhite.
He rides in the big shiny slay and his reindeers puts him.
He carrys a big hevy red bag on his sor red back.
He very big and fat is a pumpkin tree and he says "HO HO HO" merry christmas to all and to all a good night?"
I hope you read what this says?
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Date: December 08, 2003 03:22 PM
Author: MA (SHERWOOD)
Subject: Setting2
I am talking about the North Pole. The North Pole is so cold. How could santa live there or even walk there? He must be warm there. Also the elves walk in snow without shoes. How could live in a cabin.
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:56 PM
Author: NI SHERWOOD
Subject: reply about the north pole
Matt think your story is really nice to read to your mom.I think you could do more than that at home and puting more stuff on the pece of paper matt.
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Date: December 08, 2003 03:27 PM
Author: RY (SHERWOOD)
Subject: Setting2
SETTING
Santa's house has all kinds of bright ideas all around the house. His house is a mansion with tons of rooms for the oh so nice elves. Somewhere in Santa's house there's a special room where he keeps all the childrens toys. They're so neat. On the outside there's a gigantic tree and it has every flavor candy cane. There's lights too.All kinds of lights. There's even a star on top of the Christmas tree. It's always shining bright yellow and it has points. Best of all Santa's got a velvet red sleigh and attached to that sleigh there's eight miniature reindeer with one with the reddest and brightest nose of all. On the outside there's a skating rink and it's packed with elves every where. There's elves making snowdeer and there's snowmen with brooms, sticks, carrots, and raisins. Oh I heard there's an ice slide that goes into hot bubbling water so they can have a little fun through the whole entire year.
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:47 PM
Author: NI(Sherwood)
Subject: santashouse
I like how you made your setingin your story.When i was Reading your story i thot you did a really good job on your story ry.I did really like it.
from your friend nico
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:47 PM
Author: NI(Sherwood)
Subject: santashouse
I like how you made your setingin your story.When i was Reading your story i thot you did a really good job on your story ry.I did really like it.
from your friend nico
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:33 PM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
I think that you've did a good job with with your writing.I think that you can descrived more things that is in your sentences.
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:58 PM
Author: BaSHERWOOD
Subject: Santa
I think that you have lots of discription and yours is
really coo.You should give a little more discription
But other wise yours is good!
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:58 PM
Author: BaSHERWOOD
Subject: Santa
I think that you have lots of discription and yours is
really coo.You should give a little more discription
But other wise yours is good!
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