Date: December 18, 2003 09:37 AM
Author: BESHERWOOD
Subject: DESCRIPTIOM
If I were a teacher I would be a science teacher why the science teacher work,s hard
for science class because. I like to teach science it is the teacher,s important job
because the science teacher gives out science work
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Date: December 18, 2003 09:47 AM
Author: BA SHERWOOD
Subject: DESCRIPTION SCIANCE
HI. YOU SHOULD MAYBE TALK MORE ABOUT THE SIANCE
AND PUT MORE EFOR IN TO IT BUT IT IS REALLY GOOD!
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Date: December 18, 2003 10:10 AM
Author: ANSHERWOOD
Subject: DESCRIPTTONS
I LIKE YOUR DESCRIPIPTTONS IT IS GOOD.THE post like is whan you side I'M eat the kids for LAECH.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:38 PM
Author: RY sherwood
If I were a teacher I would be a science teacher why the science teacher works hard.
I like science class because. I like to get taught science it is the teachers because its an important job because the science teacher gives out science work.
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Date: January 05, 2004 03:04 PM
Author: Ba sherwood
If I were a teacher I would be a wonderful science teacher why the science teacher works so hard
for science class because. I like to teach science it is the teacher important job
because the science teacher gives out reall science work1
I helped you by changing most of your work and I made
it really better
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Date: December 18, 2003 09:38 AM
Author: CO SHERWOOD
Subject: Description
DMX
I am a boy who loves to hockey.
I wonder about my imaagination.
I hear the sound of the sea splashing.
I see the light from the lighthouse.
I want a snowboard.
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
I pretend that I'm a monster.
I feel that i am being followe.
I touch god's beautiful hands.
I worry that I'm going to die at a young age.
I cry when my great grandpa died
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
I understand that when it is time for some one to passed a way.
I say that I believe in GOD!
I dream that I was the strongest man in the world.
I try my hordest in reading.
I hope that I will become a lawyer.
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
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Date: December 18, 2003 09:54 AM
Author: RY SHERWOOD
Subject: reply to discriptino
I think your discription was good because it had discription and it had how you felt when your grandpa died. I think you can improve your dicription by how you felt when your grandpa died were you mad or crying or where you fealing miserable or where you angry with tears. Thats how you can improve and have a Merry Chrismas.
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Date: December 18, 2003 10:11 AM
Author: CH SHERWOOD
Subject: DESCRIPTIONS
I like your bio poem very much
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:45 PM
Author: cosherwood
I like your bio poem and you
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Date: January 05, 2004 10:04 AM
Author: Nurit
Subject: Description Reply
Nice description!
We like how you based the poem about your life.
We extreamly like how it's about dreams and destiny!
We also liked when you said "I touch god's beautiful hands"
You could go back and fix your spelling and grammer.(eg.I am a boy who loves to hockey "you should change to" I am a boy who loves to play hockey)
From,
Christina & Jessica
G.H.L.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:36 PM
Author: AN SRHERWOOD
I am a boy who loves to hockey.
I wonder about my Fraunds
I hear the sound of the sea the waves star in the night sky.
I see the light from the light sky.
I want a snowboard.
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
I pretend that I'm a king.
I feel that i am being followe.
I touch god's beautiful hands.
I worry that I'm going to die at a young age.
I cry when my great grandpa died
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
I understand that when it is time for some one to passed a way.
I say that I believe in GOD!
I dream that I was the strongest man in the world.
I try my hordest in reading.
I hope that I will become a lawyer.
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:38 PM
Author: BASHERWOOD
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
I wonder about my imaagination.
I hear the beautiful sound of the sea splashing.
I see the light from the bright light house.
I want a hot snowboard.
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
I pretend that I'm a scary monster.
I feel that i am being followed. i can
touch god's beautiful hands.
I worry that I'm going to die at a pretty young age.
I cryid when my great grandpa died
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
I understand that when it is time for some one to passed a way.
I say that I trully believe in GOD!
I dream that I was the strongest man and the bavest man in the world.
I try my hordest in reading.
I hope that I will become a lawyer.
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
I think that you did a wonerful job and it
was a bite bettre when i helped you!
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Date: January 05, 2004 03:11 PM
Author: JO SHERWOOD
I am a boy who loves to hockey.
I wonder about my imaagination.
I hear the sound of the sea splashing on a hot sonny day.
I see the light from the lighthouse ona deark clear night.
I want the best snowboard in the world so I can go down the most fearfloles monint in the world mabe I might bit 10000 hors pore going down it.
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
I pretend that I'm a monster so scarey that even scarey will
thinkt that scarey.
I feel that I am being followe.
I touch god's beautiful hands.
I worry that I'm going to die at a young age.
I cry when my great grandpa died
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
I understand that when it is time for some one to passed a way.
I say that I believe in GOD!
I dream that I was the strongest man in the world.
I try my hordest in reading.
I hope that I will become a lawyer.
I am a boy who loves to play hockey.
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Date: December 18, 2003 10:13 AM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
Subject: Description
Description
The best book I Have Ever Read.
I've read the best book and it feels like I'm inside of the book. It feels so really cool when you read the book in your life. Do you now that the better you can read the interustinger the book is. When you are asleep it feels like you are inside the book. You can read every where you go like on the swings, on the bus, on the bed, you can read to the class, to the dogs, to your mom and dad, to your grandma and grandpa, to your sisters, to your friends, to your self and there is many more things that or where or can or do to read. That why I love reading all the time.
THE END.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:05 PM
Author: ju SHERWOOD
The best book I Have Ever Read.
I've read the best book and it feels like I'm inside of the book. It feels so really funny when you read the book in your life. Do you now that the better you can read the more interusting the book is. When you are asleep it feels like you are inside the book because you are dreaming. You can read every where you go like on the swings, on the bus, on the bed, you can read to the class, to the dogs, to your mom and dad, to your grandma and grandpa, to your sisters, to your friends, to your self . That why I love reading all the time.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:35 PM
Author: RY sherwood
Conference: Dovercourt School
Forum: Tools4Writing - English
Thread: Click here!
Date: January 05, 2004 02:05 PM
Author: ju SHERWOOD
The best book I Have Ever Read.
I've read the best book and it feels like I'm inside of the book like a dream. It feels so really funny when you read the book in your life. Do you now that the better you can read the more interusting the book is. When you are asleep it feels like you are inside the book because you are dreaming. You can read every where you go like on the swings, on the bus, on the bed, you can read to the class, to the dogs, to your mom and dad, to your grandma and grandpa, to your sisters, to your friends, to your self . That why I love reading all the time.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:54 PM
Author: kesherwood
I've read the best book and it feels like I'm inside of the book. It feels so really funny when you read the book in your life. Do you now that the better you can read the more interusting the book is. When you are asleep it feels like you are inside the book because you are dreaming. You can read every where you go like on the swings, on the bus, on the bed, you can read to the class, to the dogs, to your mom and dad, to your grandma and grandpa, to your sisters, to your friends, to your self . That why I love reading all the time.
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Date: January 06, 2004 10:14 AM
Author: Selina (Dovercourt)
I agree, i like reading too, and it's very fun to read, and you can learn much much more after school just by reading.
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Date: January 13, 2004 09:42 AM
Author: Selina[Dovercourt]
i think your story was very intrusting, i always have the same feeling too. a lot of people who like to read always have the same feeling like me and you.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:52 PM
Author: Ba SHERWOOD
The best book I Have Ever Read.
I've read the best book and it feels like I'm inside of the book. It feels so really cool when you read the book in your life. Do you now that the better you can read the interustinger the book is. When you are fast asleep it feels like you are inside the book. You can read every where you go like on the fun swings, on the yellow bus, on the cozt bed, you can read to the class, to the dogs, to your mom and dad, to your grandma and grandpa, to your sisters, to your friends, to your self and there is many more great things that or where or can or do to read. That why I love reading all the time.
I think that you did a wonerful job!
I changed your work by addin good details!
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Date: January 05, 2004 03:06 PM
Author: RY sherwood
The best book I Have Ever Read.
I've read the best book and it feels like I'm inside of the book. It feels so really cool when you read the book in your life. Do you now that the better you can read the more interestinger the book is. When you are asleep it feels like you are inside the book. You can read every where you go on the swings, on the bus, on the bed, you can read to the class, to the dogs, to your mom and dad, to your grandma and grandpa, to your sisters, to your friends, to your self and there is many more things that or where or can or do to read. That why I love reading all the time.
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Date: January 06, 2004 10:09 AM
Author: Selina (Dovercourt)
Hey Jenny, i love reading too, but you shouldn't read on the bus, cause something bad might happen to your eye.
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Date: January 08, 2004 01:37 PM
Author: RJ(HighPark)
Subject: nice writing
i like your writing
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Date: January 06, 2004 09:40 AM
Author: sandy ( High Park)
Subject: Response Jornal
this is about a book I read called Sweet Grass
I can't believe that the native people use to get married
so early and just for wealth. They married at the age of 15 or 16, but mainly the story is about a girl name sweet grass. She is a young native girl in the black foot tribe. She is longing to get married and hopefully to a young man, Eagle Sun, I really enjoy you reading to us about sweet grass is my favorite character because she thinks positive she also listens to what you want to say. It reminds me of the way they live back in the past.
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Date: January 06, 2004 09:45 AM
Author: briann(high park)
Subject: response journal
One event that reminds me of my own life is when Parvana turns into a boy and with my new haircut everybody says I look like a boy. But nobody said anything to her and everybody always says stuff to me about my hair and how ugly it is. Parvana just blends in with all the boys. She's lucky because she doesn't get called a boy or ugly now with my short hair I feel left out from all the other girls because their hair is nice and long and they can put their hair up in a ponytail and all I can do is put a barrette in my bangs and am kind of "jealous" of all the other girls in my class because their hair is nice and long and beautiful.
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Date: January 06, 2004 09:46 AM
Author: Amber(High Park)
In the book, Heartland, by Lauren Brooke, the setting is mostly played
at a farm that takes care of mistreated, abandoned or abused horses. Heartland is a small farm with two barns with happy horses stalled in about fifteen clean fresh straw stalls. There are three pastures with horses grazing in the whistling wind. In a very quiet pasture is a oak tree in the middle. Beside the tree is buried a legendary champion gelding jumper that died of cancer because his caretaker died and he refused to eat. Peagus jumped with Tim Flemming. Next to the pasture is a barn with a overcrowed tack room with photos of horses they have treated and saddles stacked everywhere. Next to it in the barn is a feed room. The feed room contains tuns of types of feed and oils they use to relax and treat the horses. During the day Ty, Heartlans's stable hand is excersising horses or working with them. Lou, Amy's sister is typing up finacial figures. Ben, the other stablehand is cleaning stalls and Amy is at school. As soon as Amy gets home the training rings are busy.
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Date: January 06, 2004 10:02 AM
Author: Selina (Dovercourt)
Subject: Pioneer Setting
Pioneer Setting
One cold winter day, I was helping mama and papa make carmel sticky candy. It was my favourite, and I was going to make it today. Mama gave me the frying pan, and I went outside to fetch some clean snow. Then, I went into the house. I got the carmel out, and started to pour it all over the snow. A little while later, mama cuted a piece for me to try. It was extra sweet cause of the extra carmel, and it was extra smooth. Before dinner, I took 6 pieces over to my best hunting friend, Anna. She loved it, especially the super sweet carmel. After a long chat, it was time for Anna to eat dinner. I headed off to my cozy cabin for a wonderful dinner. That afternoon, I had the bestest, sweetest, smoothest carmel candy in my life.
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Date: January 09, 2004 02:01 PM
Author: catherine (Sherwood)
Subject: Reply to selina
Selina, I am going to change your story a little bit. Hope you will like the changes. Selina is a nice girl, she likes to make caramal candy. After she made her first caramal candy, she became an expert in making caramal candies. She takes them to her friend Anna. Anna had a piece and loved it. Anna wanted to learn how to make them too. Anna and Selina became famous candy makers in Canada and they called their shop Laura Secord Candy Store.
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Date: January 09, 2004 03:06 PM
Author: shanissa sherwood
Subject: reply to selina
dear, selina I hope you like the story I changed of yours. one day a girl named selina was making caramel candy with her mom. she was geting used to making candy with her mother.she siad it was fun.aftershe was done shetook a nap she got tierd.
AND THAT'S WHAT SHE DID.
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Date: January 13, 2004 10:04 AM
Author: Irene[Dovercourt]
Subject: Pioneer Setting
I like your story.I don't really like carmels before,know I think it taste good.
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Date: January 06, 2004 10:03 AM
Author: Patricia(Dovercourt)
Subject: Summer Night
Summer Night On a peaceful summer night I can taste the freshness of the air. I can see the bright, beautiful moon that is hanging is the sky; I can see the glittering stars shining brightly far, far away in the galaxy in the dark sky of this summer night. I cannot hear the chirping of birds, but I can hear the peaceful swaying of the trees and the soft whistling of the wind. I feel like I am drifting away in the soft breeze, I feel light and happy. In this time of day I feel like I am in heaven, on a peaceful summer night.
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Date: January 06, 2004 10:06 AM
Author: Selina(Dovercourt)
hey patricia, this is a great story, but maybe you can try by using less *I*.
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Date: January 09, 2004 03:08 PM
Author: paige and sams(sherwood)
Subject: replying to patricia
I am going changing a little bit about your story i hope you like my change. Once upon a time.I sow how pritty the moon and stars were.I saw how sparlity the moon was the stars were in the galexy. I couldn't stay very long. i was very happy at my friends
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Date: January 13, 2004 09:51 AM
Author: Leanne[Dovercourt]
Subject: Summer Night
I really like your setting Patricia because of the way you describe it. It makes me feel like I'm in place where there's star's around it kind of feels like the galaxy to me. Your story is great Patricia, it makes me feel like I'm going to have a wonderful summer just by reading it!
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Date: January 13, 2004 09:57 AM
Author: Patricia[Dovercourt]
Subject: summer night
your setting makes me feel happy I can see the trees Ican see the moon .you should think about writing a book. From Michaela
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Date: January 13, 2004 09:58 AM
Author: Anh[Dovercourt]
I liked your story Patricia,but how about taste and smell?
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Date: January 06, 2004 10:07 AM
Author: Jenny(Dovercourt)
Subject: Countryside Setting
Countryside Setting I see farmers sweating, cows grazing near the pond, butterflies flying gracefully over the meadows. I smell the sweet grass, the farmer's wife's vegetable soup, flowers' wonderful scent. I feel a butterfly landing on my finger, a cow's swishing tail, a kitten gently pushing me forward. I hear the cows' mooing, the hen's clucking, the farmer's wife humming. I taste a carrot grown by the farmer's wife, fresh milk from the cow, and egg's from the hen.
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Date: January 06, 2004 10:11 AM
Author: Selina (Dovercourt)
Hey Jenny, this a great story, when i read it, i feel like i'm in the story, it makes me feel a lot more relaxing when i'm reading this story.
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Date: January 06, 2004 10:16 AM
Author: Jenny(Dovercourt)
Subject: good job Jenny!
i think that your setting was great and that it really made me imagine that i was out there in the country and tah i could feel all those things and taste all those stuff, so i really think that you did a great job!
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Date: January 07, 2004 10:15 AM
Author: reply Leanne
Subject: countryside Setting
Wow! what a wonderful setting Jenny!This setting is just unbelivible!When I read it made me feel like I was living at the countryside! You know what Jenny, I suggest you right a book or poem or anything and give it to mr. Lummis and he'll probably send it to magpie and get it published!
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Date: January 13, 2004 10:01 AM
Author: Alvina[Dovercourt]
Subject: Countryside setting
Your story is fantastic!!! Especially the part where you wrote"I could feel a butterfly landing on my finger." Great job!!!
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Date: January 13, 2004 10:06 AM
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