Date: October 31, 2003 11:20 AM
Author: Kelisha(HighPark )
Old Mr.Notta no knows how old he really is some people say he's 100 or 95. The kid legend I he's got a big hunched back, long long heard, and he's bald know one knows why he wear a checked shirt and blue jeans everyday! Know one goes in his yard after jimmy did! He's a loner who hates kids and loves newspaper. The only thing he really likes is his cat, scratch
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Date: October 31, 2003 11:20 AM
Author: calvin(HighPark )
Subject: haunted house (c.n.)
I went walking down the street when I saw a big creepy house I walked up stairs and opened the door. I saw a big old coffin I also saw a spider web and a tranchela. I heared the stairs move when I was going to the dungeon when I got to the dungeon I smelled moldy air. I felt the cold breeze coming from the broken window. I tasted slime to. I got stuck in the house when I smelled smoke.
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Date: October 31, 2003 11:20 AM
Author: calvin(HighPark )
Subject: haunted house (c.n.)
I went walking down the street when I saw a big creepy house I walked up stairs and opened the door. I saw a big old coffin I also saw a spider web and a tranchela. I heared the stairs move when I was going to the dungeon when I got to the dungeon I smelled moldy air. I felt the cold breeze coming from the broken window. I tasted slime to. I got stuck in the house when I smelled smoke.
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Date: November 26, 2003 04:40 PM
Author: calvinHigh Park)
Subject: good job calvin.
good piece of writing calvin. keep it up.dad.
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Date: October 31, 2003 11:30 AM
Author: calvin(HighPark )
Subject: scary problem
I tried to call the firefighters but they were already on a rescue. I was crying like I was going to faint. The flames were getting Closer and closer I wished I never came in this house.
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Date: October 31, 2003 11:34 AM
Author: Tristan(High Park)
Subject: character
Sammy wears a blue baseball cap, black jeans and a blue and white T-shirt. He likes cats, horror movies, and skate boards.
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Date: October 31, 2003 11:35 AM
Author: taylor(High Park)
Neil was ten he loved chocolate any kind of chocolate and he eats a whole lot of it, but he hates girls. Its weird Neil is skinny and tall like me you would think he is fat but he isn't. He is pretty funny and he likes to bike. He has a weird talent he can eat three chocolate bars in two minutes. He has short, brown hair. He is not allowed to go to the store alone. He will steal chocolate if he wants too. He has three friends, Bill, Tim and Taylor.
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Date: November 17, 2003 02:52 PM
Author: Christian (High Park)
Subject: Great and funny story
It was really funny when you said neil would eat any type of choclate super job and funny!
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Date: November 17, 2003 03:11 PM
Author: keith(High Park)
Subject: its a totaly cool story
your story is totaly CoOL I LIked the part when he stole the choclates your story is the totaly best awsome story ]
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Date: October 31, 2003 11:38 AM
Author: Tristan(High Park)
Subject: Setting
I was eating a sour candy by the cellar door. It was so sour. I fell in. Finally when I got up I felt heavy breathing from behind me. I turned and a man grabbed me and put me in a chest by a hole in the ground in the graveyard.
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Date: October 31, 2003 11:39 AM
Author: Tristan(High Park)
Subject: Problem/solution
I turned and a man grabbed me and put me in a chest by a hole in the ground in the graveyard. Then a mouse heard me scream 'help" and he chewed on the wooden lock until it snapped open. I got out and ran to the house.
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Date: November 17, 2003 02:43 PM
Author: christian (High Park)
Subject: great porblem
i really liked when you put the man grabbed you and put you in the graveyard it was great!
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Date: January 09, 2004 03:05 PM
Author: Samantha(Sherwood)
Subject: Reply
Hey! Very cool setting.I liked it alot.I am going to make a story out of it.Hope you like it. One day I was eating some candy witch was very sour.I was standing write beside the seller and it was so sour I fell in.When I woke up I feltt someone or somthing breathing very heavy on me.When I turned around a man grabbed me and through me in a chest and took me to the grave yard and burried me.I was so scared.But he was not very smart. he let the key slip through the look. So I unlooked it and looked around he was not there so I went home.I never ate sour candy by the seller again and never saw him again.
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Date: November 03, 2003 03:11 PM
Author: Madame Godin(Greenfield) (dgodin@epsb.ca)
Subject: Great News!
Hello grade three! Welcome to the message board. We are going to use this as a tool to respond to the work of other students. Other students will also be looking at some of your work. You'll find it fun to see your work on this message board and then read work written by kids from our class and other schools. Let's have fun!!! Madame Godin
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Date: December 03, 2003 08:34 AM
Author: Mrs. Renneberg SHERWOOD
Subject: Our writing
Please post your character and setting writings here. Thank you Mrs. Renneberg
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Date: December 03, 2003 09:29 AM
Author: JU SHERWOOD
Subject: SETTING HOUSE
My tv is small. My house is small. There is one game system. The balcony is big. The living room is small. There is one fridge.
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:40 PM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
I liked how you did the first part of your story.I think that you can do an better job with the last sentence that you did.
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:44 PM
Author: RY SHERWOOD
Subject: Reply to Living room
I like your living room. I think you can imrove your story by putting more dicription and words.
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Date: December 15, 2003 03:00 PM
Author: ME SHERWOOD
Subject: living room
I think our writing is very good.
BUT YOU CAN DO MORE BETTER THEN THAT BUTIT IS GOOD.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:37 PM
Author: me sherwood
My tv is very small. Also my house is small. There is one game system. The balcony is heuds. The living room is smallest. There is one fridge
YOU DID A TRIFICK JOB
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Date: January 10, 2004 09:15 AM
Author: LA [Sherwood]
You did a good job. Maybe you could just talk about one room. Maybe you could just talk about one room and tell more about it.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:40 PM
Author: CH sherwood
My tv is very small. Also my house is small. There is one game system. The balcony is heuds. The living room is smallest. There is one fridge
YOU DID A TRIFICK JOB
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Date: January 10, 2004 09:20 AM
Author: LA [Sherwood]
You did a good job on your writing. Maybe you could just tell about one room but say lots more.
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Date: December 03, 2003 09:29 AM
Author: MT SHERWOOD
Subject: SETTING KITCHEN
Setting matt
I am talking about our kitchen. We have lots of candles. Also we have 4 place mats. My mom has a big fridge. We also have a water jug. I have a poster in the kitchen. Josh has his candle in the kitchen. Our kitchen is yellow and it has 2 doors. Our kitchen has 2 windows. My moms kitchen floor is squares that are black and white.
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:46 PM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
I really liked how you told how your kitten.I think that you can do a better job then you did.
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:40 PM
Author: RY SHERWOOD
Subject: Reply to Kitchen
I like how you use the discriptive words to say how your stuff was.I think yuo can imrove by adding more fancy words
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:40 PM
Author: RY SHERWOOD
Subject: Reply to Kitchen
I like how you use the discriptive words to say how your stuff was.I think yuo can imrove by adding more fancy words
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Date: December 03, 2003 09:29 AM
Author: ED SHERWOOD
Subject: SETTING KITCHEN
SETTING
My Kitchen
In my kitchen there are cups and plates! My kitchen has a table and chairs! I have a fridge with food and juice in my kitchen! There is a tap with running water that is yummy! There is a stove to cook with in my kitchen! My kitchen has drawers full of forks,spoons,and knives!
(http://forums.epsb.net/forums/Index.cfm?CFApp=2&Message_ID=1574)
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:51 PM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
I think that you did a good job throw all the parts that you did.I think that you can do a better job that you've done.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:42 PM
Author: NI SHERWOOD
My Kitchen
In my kitchen there are cups and plates! My kitchen has a table and chairs! I have a fridge with food and juice in my kitchen! There is a tap with running water that is yummy! There is a stove to cook with in my kitchen! My kitchen has drawers full of forks,spoons,and knives!And we have a covered strainer for pasta.
I made it more interesting for you by adding more things in it.
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Date: January 10, 2004 09:32 AM
Author: LA [Sherwood]
You did a good job on your writing. Maybe you can tell us more about the room. I think you can tell about the water using better words.
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Date: December 03, 2003 09:29 AM
Author: CH SHERWOOD
Subject: SETTING MY ROOM
Setting
My room is like a golden chest of toys.
This has lots of books in my room.
It has a bed and pillows and blanket.
I like my room full of crosses and posters.
This room has a dresser and a big shelf and closet.
My room is the best ever.
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:54 PM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
ij think that you did a coolest thing ever with your story.I think that you can put an preation on your writing more.
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Date: December 18, 2003 09:55 AM
Author: NI SHERWOOD
Subject: reply to my room is golden
I really like your story and i think you could do more than that and your mom and dad will really like your story and they will not stop looking at your story and they will like your story.I really really think you could do more than that ch and i really like your story ch.And you could read your story to the calss and they will like your story ch.I think you could do more sentences in your story ch.I think you could inprov your writeing ch.
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:53 PM
Author: RY sherwood
My room is like a golden chest of toys of my favourite.
My room has a lot of books.
My room has a bed chomphy pillows and soft blanket.
I like my room full of crosses and posters.
my very own room has a dresser and a big shelf and closet.
My room is the best ever.
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Date: December 03, 2003 09:29 AM
Author: AM SHERWOOD
Subject: CHARACTER MY MOM
character Amal
My mom is nise. My mom love me. My mom give me a home to live in. My mom buys me clothes. My mom give me maney. My mom gave me life. My mom gives me food. character Amal
My mom is nise. My mom love me. My mom give me a home to live in. My mom buys me clothes. My mom give me maney. My mom gave me life. My mom gives me food.
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:57 PM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
I liked your writing but you can do a better even better writing that you've didi.
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:59 PM
Author: RY SHERWOOD
Subject: Reply to your mom
I think your character about your mom is nice I think your mom is nice too .I think you can improve your story by adding more discriptive words.
(http://forums.epsb.net/forums/Index.cfm?CFApp=2&Message_ID=1804)
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:42 PM
Author: BE SHERWOOD
My mom is a great persons. My mom loves me so much. My mom gives me a house to live in. My mom buys me clothes. My mom give me money to buy games. My mom gave me life. My mom gives me healthy food.
(http://forums.epsb.net/forums/Index.cfm?CFApp=2&Message_ID=1942)
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:59 PM
Author: kesherwood
My mom is a vantastik persons? My mom loves me so much that she gigales? My mom gives me a house to live in. My mom buys me lots and lots of clouses? My mom give me money to buy games so I do not be bord or anything? My mom gave me food so I can servive. My mom gives me healthy food so I do not get sick?
I think that you will do a much better job?
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Date: January 05, 2004 03:01 PM
Author: AN SHERWOOD
My mom is a vantastik persons? My mom loves me so much that she gigales? My mom gives me a house to live in. My mom buys me lots and lots of clouses? My mom give me money to buy games so I do not be bord or anything? My mom gave me food so I can servive. My mom gives me healthy food so I do not get sick?
I think that you will do a much better job?
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Date: January 05, 2004 03:01 PM
Author: AN SHERWOOD
My mom is a vantastik persons? My mom loves me so much that she gigales? My mom gives me a house to live in. My mom buys me lots and lots of clouses? My mom give me money to buy games so I do not be bord or anything? My mom gave me food so I can servive. My mom gives me healthy food so I do not get sick?
I think that you will do a much better job?
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Date: December 03, 2003 09:29 AM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
Subject: SETTING THE BASSEMENT
SETTING
I have 3 computers by a punching bag. My dad has 3 computers. There's 2 chairs in front of a computer. My dad has 1 bed to sleep in the basement. I and my dad has 1 punching bag to punch. There is 1 fish tank with my fish Smielly and Amys fish Zippy and 4 more fishes that are my dads, are in the fish tank.
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:59 PM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
I liked how I've did my writing but I can do a much better objet.
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Date: December 03, 2003 09:29 AM
Author: KE SHERWOOD
Subject: SETTING MY HOUSE
setting kelvin
When you walk into my house we take our shoes off. Then you take a few steps up stairs.
Now you're up stairs and you see our kitchen door.
In order to go in my room, I have to turn right.
Once you take a few steps after rigth turn you will find three doors.
The door on the left will take you to my room.
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:07 PM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
I just loved how you've did your sentences.But you can do better then this one why I think that this one is a little bit boring you should do more sentences?
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:28 PM
Author: me sherwood
When you walk into my house we take our shoes off. Then you take a few steps up the stairs.
Now you're up stairs and you see the kitchen door.
In order to go in my room,you have to turn right.
Once you take a few steps after rigth turn we will find three doors.
The door on the left will take you to your room.
(http://forums.epsb.net/forums/Index.cfm?CFApp=2&Message_ID=1930)
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Date: January 05, 2004 03:00 PM
Author: RY SHERWOOD
setting kelvin
When you walk into my house we take our dirty shoes off. Then you put them on the carpet siftly threw the air.
Now you're up stairs and you see our dusty kitchen door.
In order to go in my room I have to turn slowly right.
Once you take a few steps after rigth turn you will find three doors.
The door on the left will take you to my room my very own.
(http://forums.epsb.net/forums/Index.cfm?CFApp=2&Message_ID=1962)
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Date: December 03, 2003 09:29 AM
Author: ME SHERWOOD
Subject: SETTING MOMS ROOM
setting in my moms room She has one t.v. it is black and with lots of butins.Her stand is brown with lots of srcules and lots of nobs.The facuume has lots corculs black and blue on it .My mom has one lorm clock that is black and red it has lots of butins.There is one bed it is a very big bed it has the corcul of gold .In her room she has one piture of a car is white.
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:58 PM
Author: AN SHERWOOD
Subject: reply mom bedroom
make moor thing in your mom bedroom.
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Date: December 03, 2003 09:29 AM
Author: AM SHERWOOD
Subject: CHARACTER MY MOM
character Amal
My mom is nise. My mom love me. My mom give me a home to live in. My mom buys me clothes. My mom give me maney. My mom gave me life. My mom gives me food. character Amal
My mom is nise. My mom love me. My mom give me a home to live in. My mom buys me clothes. My mom give me maney. My mom gave me life. My mom gives me food.
(http://forums.epsb.net/forums/Index.cfm?CFApp=2&Message_ID=1580)
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Date: January 05, 2004 06:34 PM
Author: la SHERWOOD
Subject: MOM
This is very good. Can you start your sentences in different ways?
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Date: December 03, 2003 09:33 AM
Author: BE SHERWOOD
Subject: CHARACTER EDDY
Character Ben
My favourite characher is eddy. why because he has three friends howie liza and melody.
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Date: December 04, 2003 09:22 AM
Author: CH SHERWOOD
Subject: CHARACTER
Veins is very tall.
Vance super grumpy in the morning.
Vance is the biggest in the house.
Vance is sometimes funny.
Vance is sometimes road like burping and not say exsqume.
Vance has a pa,2. and a playstaytion,1 playstaytion,2 game cube and a TV.
Most of all Vance has a dart.
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Date: January 05, 2004 06:37 PM
Author: LA SHERWOOD
Subject: Vance
You have lots of good description. Can you start your sentences in different ways?
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Date: December 04, 2003 09:25 AM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
Subject: CHARACTER
CHARACTER
The Puppy.
It has bright brown eyes. The puppy has curly blond hair. There is a white heart on it's stomach. On the back of it's tail it has a gray stripe. Around the neck it has a navy blue collar. She has a pink, red nose. Her name is Brightly.
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Date: January 05, 2004 06:39 PM
Author: LA SHERWOOD
Subject: puppy
Where is this puppy? Whose puppy is it?
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Date: December 04, 2003 09:25 AM
Author: BA SHERWOOD
Subject: CHARACTER
CHARACTER Bassma!
Bear Noel
Oliver Dunrea
1. Bear Noel loved to eat fish, bearys, bananas, water,
The Bear has 8 friend. Bear Noel is a Christmas Bear he loved Christmas. in the north pole. Bear noel would sit and drink his hot chocolate with his friend. It is Chritmas Eve in the north polel. Snow white again a darkening.Sky. It shimmers and sparkles on the trees.Snows blankets the!
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:42 PM
Author: ryan (Sherwood)
Subject: reply to north pole
I think your story was great it talk about good stuff and his friends you were adding characters into the story.I think you can improve your story by puting diferrent starting add add moe info about the bear and his friends wut his den look like? Is he friendly?
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:07 PM
Author: ME SHERWOOD
Subject: 1 BEAR
I think you should do more dscriving.I think you should put a s on the end of friend.
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Date: December 04, 2003 09:30 AM
Author: ED SHERWOOD
Subject: CHARACTER
CHARACTER
Sean Paul
Sean Paul likes to wear his hair in little braids!
Sean Paul likes to sing hiphop music!
People can't understand what he is saying when he sings!
Sean Paul's girl friend's name is Beyonce Noles!
Sean Paul always looks mean in all of his pictures!
Sean Paul is friends with other famous singers!
(http://forums.epsb.net/forums/Index.cfm?CFApp=2&Message_ID=1589)
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Date: December 04, 2003 09:30 AM
Author: ME SHERWOOD
Subject: CHARACTER BLOSSMA
character ME BLOSSAM This CHARACTER in this story was Blossam.She had red hair with a pony in it.Her closes are pink and black. Her eyes are pink and white.She has white and black shoes.One more thing she has 2 best friends.
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Date: December 15, 2003 01:52 PM
Author: RY (Sherwood)
Subject: reply to character
I think your story was great because it was filled with colours and dicription.I think you can improve it by ptuing better discription like if her hair was curly.
(http://forums.epsb.net/forums/Index.cfm?CFApp=2&Message_ID=1755)
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Date: December 15, 2003 03:01 PM
Author: CHSHERWOOD
Subject: Blossam
I like when you describe the different colours.
I think you should make your work loger.
(http://forums.epsb.net/forums/Index.cfm?CFApp=2&Message_ID=1808)
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Date: December 04, 2003 09:30 AM
Author: AM SHERWOOD
Subject: CHARACTER
My mom is nise. My mom love me. My mom give me a home to live in. My mom buys me clothes. My mom give me maney. My mom gave me life. My mom gives me food.
(http://forums.epsb.net/forums/Index.cfm?CFApp=2&Message_ID=1591)
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Date: January 05, 2004 06:45 PM
Author: LA SHERWOOD
You have lots if information. Can you start your sentences differently?
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Date: December 04, 2003 09:30 AM
Author: ME SHERWOOD
Subject: CHARACTER BLOSSMA
character ME BLOSSAM This CHARACTER in this story was Blossam.She had red hair with a pony in it.Her closes are pink and black. Her eyes are pink and white.She has white and black shoes.One more thing she has 2 best friends.
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(http://forums.epsb.net/forums/Index.cfm?CFApp=2&Message_ID=1592)
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Date: January 05, 2004 02:02 PM
Author: BASHERWOOD
character ME BLOSSAM This CHARACTER in this story was Blossam.She had A blody red hair with a ponytail in it.Her clothes were pink and black. Her small eyes are pink and white.She has white and dark black shoes.One more thing she has 2 best friends.
- I think that it is better with all the discription and the detalis!
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Date: December 04, 2003 09:31 AM
Author: AN SHERWOOD
Subject: CHARACTER
CHARACTER Rosle the Racoon. Rosle's has a mask around the eyes. Role's has a white and; brown tail. Rosle's has brown eyes. Rosle's has a white face. Rose's has black hands. Rose's has white and black years.
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:46 PM
Author: RY SHERWOOD
Subject: Reply to Rosie
I lie your character because you can discrive it good. I think you can improve it by putting better dicriptive words.
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Date: December 08, 2003 03:11 PM
Author: (SHERWOOD
Subject: RY SETTING
SETTING
Santa's house has all kinds of bright ideas all around the house. His house is a mansion with tons of rooms for the oh so nice elves. Somewhere in Santa's house there's a special room where he keeps all the childrens toys. They're so neat. On the outside there's a gigantic tree and it has every flavor candy cane. There's lights too.All kinds of lights. There's even a star on top of the Christmas tree. It's always shining bright yellow and it has points. Best of all Santa's got a velvet red sleigh and attached to that sleigh there's eight miniature reindeer with one with the reddest and brightest nose of all. On the outside there's a skating rink and it's packed with elves every where. There's elves making snowdeer and there's snowmen with brooms, sticks, carrots, and raisins. Oh I heard there's an ice slide that goes into hot bubbling water so they can have a little fun through the whole entire year.
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Date: January 05, 2004 06:53 PM
Author: LA SHERWOOD
You did an excellent job. What happened to Mrs. Claus?
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Date: January 09, 2004 03:01 PM
Author: Ilyas(Sherwood)
Subject: Reply
I Think I like your story.Because I like what your writing.
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Date: December 08, 2003 03:13 PM
Author: AL SHERWOOD
Subject: SETTING
SETTING.
Santa's North Pole.
The North Pole is very, very cold as cold as a freezer. It has elves, reindeer and penguin. Some people live at the North Pole like Santa Claus and Mrs. Claus. There's a workshop where the elves work to make toys for the good girls and boys on Christmas eve. There is lots of snow at the North Pole. Elves go sledding when it's their time off. The elves live right beside Santa Claus. All the reindeer go in a kennel so they can't fly away. Some of the penguins live in an igloo. The elves live beside Santa so they can get there filthy, greedy hands on Mrs, Claus's cookies.
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Date: December 15, 2003 03:01 PM
Author: SA SHERWOOD
Subject: setting
I like your explaination about the setting.May be you should write more because you are a good writer.
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Date: December 08, 2003 03:14 PM
Author: AM SHERWOOD
Subject: SETTING2
Santa lives in the North pole.
Santa's home is red and white.
Santa's workshop is all filled with toys.
The Reindeer are watching Rudolph the Red Nose Reindeer movie.
Mrs Claus's bedroom is a mess.
Santa's work shop is fun.
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Date: December 15, 2003 02:07 PM
Author: NI SHERWOOD
Subject: reply to noth pol
I think your story is really good AM.
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Date: December 15, 2003 03:04 PM
Author: keSHERWOOD
Subject: reply
I like the part when the reindeer are watching rudolph.
you can put more describing.
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Date: December 18, 2003 09:19 AM
Author: NI SHERWOOD
Subject: reply to santa house
I really like your story and i really like to read it all day. i really really think you could do more than that.and your family will really like it.
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